Journey to Lands Far Far Away (OOC)

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Jun 25, 2024 3:25 pm
QuietPanther says:

With old stings, that should make the count:
Lille:4
Roald:2
Daryl:4
Albert:2
Theo:0
Ezme:0
If we want to spread around the stings to everyone we could do a different distribution. Or swap Daryl and Albert? I feel bad for abusing Albert’s lungs. I’ll make things vague, and hopefully we can montage through the work a little.
I'm fine with going for this distribution if there are no complaints :)
Not sure if it would ever make a difference, but it could make things more interesting.
Jun 27, 2024 8:30 am
It sounds like we are accepting Lille into our party. [ref]

Do we want to do anything before we camp for the night? Else I will skip us forward. We can refer back to any conversations we had along the way, of course. We can do a 'montage roll' to see how well you eat before you sleep, then move on to the next thing (and blame karabooo).
Jun 27, 2024 9:13 am
I think Kara still wanted to have more conversation between Ezme and Lille. But we also want to get moving, so perhaps on the road would work for that. Just want to make sure we get time for some good character interaction :)
Jun 27, 2024 9:47 am
That's fine. We are not in a hurry.
Jun 27, 2024 12:21 pm
vagueGM says:
It sounds like we are accepting Lille into our party. [ref]
On second thought... nah, let's not accept Lille. :P
Kidding of course :)

Albert has nothing extra to do atm, but if there is a conversation he will likely join in.
Jun 27, 2024 9:26 pm
We can jump ahead if you like now, Vague.
Jun 28, 2024 1:17 am
Lille wouldn’t let a little thing like rejection stop her :P Even if everyone had rejected her, she would have kept following you. As it is, I’m also ready to jump ahead now.
Jun 28, 2024 6:52 am
karabooo says:
So, she doesn't want money. She doesn't want to fight dark forces. All she wants is to "Learn About the World" by joining a semi-random group of individuals she hardly knows? Ezmaray's brow furrows suspiciously.
Kara, I think the part that I put in bold are thoughts, right? You can put thoughts in italic. That's the go-to formatting on GP (as far as I know). :)
Jun 28, 2024 7:22 am
That is the go-to formatting, but don't rely on formatting, make it clear with the writing that it 'internal thoughts'. So:

So, she doesn't want money. She doesn't want to fight dark forces. All she wants is to "Learn About the World" by joining a semi-random group of individuals she hardly knows? Ezmaray thinks as her brow furrows suspiciously.

That's a minimal change and a bit clumsy grammar-wise, but adding the text in red makes it clear what is going on. Formatting should be an optional afterthought.
Jun 28, 2024 3:24 pm
These are Ezme's impressions, but not her thoughts word-for-word. I generally prefer to avoid spelling out a character's thoughts and typing them out verbatim. I think this is because, much of the time, our thoughts are not spoken word-for-word in our heads. They are wordless flashes of realizations and observations. That is what I'm trying to capture with my writing.

Has my avoidance of using italicized expression of thoughts been confusing? If not, I'll likely stick with what feels right to me....
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Jun 28, 2024 3:37 pm
karabooo says:
... Has my avoidance of using italicized expression of thoughts been confusing? If not, I'll likely stick with what feels right to me....
I didn't think so. I did not notice any confusion with that post and had to go back and look for it to see. I think it was pretty clear that this was what she was thinking, adding italics should be optional, and not a thing we rely on, but being somewhat consistent does help.

The fact that someone found it unclear enough to ask does suggest it could have benefited from a clause like 'Ezme thinks to herself'. That does not imply that it was word for word her 'thoughts'.

Being clear is more important than writing 'the best prose'. Especially if others might think they need to respond to something that sounds like spoken words but was internal monologue. I have seen many games where people completely skip the "quote marks" or any mention of the character speaking and rely on the boldness to show they are saying something. This has gotten confusing. Use proper grammar, is my rule [ref]. :)
Jun 28, 2024 5:27 pm
Crap... Proper grammar. Does that mean I have to start using Google Translate again?
To clarify:
I'm usually writing on my phone, which makes looking up the correct spelling and/or grammar sometimes difficult/cumbersome (in the past I used to look up the word cumbersome to make sure it is used in the right way, I stopped doing that because it delayed my postings.)
Not being a native speaker I am aware I make mistakes but I quit looking up every word to make it more fun for me to play.
If this is bothering anybody, feel free to say so 👍

I also don't mind being corrected and educated 😉
Jun 28, 2024 5:30 pm
Never been a problem.
Jun 28, 2024 6:31 pm
You’re fine, Airshark! Had no clue you weren’t a native speaker! Is it invasive of me to ask what your native language is?
Jun 28, 2024 6:33 pm
Tx!
Dutch (Flemish/Belgium)
Jun 28, 2024 6:38 pm
Awesome! I’m just a dumb American who barely speaks a little Spanish in addition to English. You have my respects!
Jun 28, 2024 9:57 pm
karabooo says:
Has my avoidance of using italicized expression of thoughts been confusing?
It wasn't confusing as to what the words were meant to say. But I had to read it 2 or 3 times wondering 'is this a thought or a narration?'. Because I was doubting if I read it correctly.
karabooo says:
These are Ezme's impressions, but not her thoughts word-for-word
I see. So somewhere in between those 2 things? 🤔

My comment was merely a suggestion in case you didn't know. :)
Jun 29, 2024 7:00 pm
I’m in the same boat(rarely literally) as Kara: American with only a little Spanish on top of my English. And also had no idea you were not a native speaker! I am equally impressed with your skills :)
Jun 29, 2024 7:07 pm
Thank you!
You are too kind 😉

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