runekyndig says:
... I get your point. ...
My 'point'? Not sure I had a point other than asking if you wanted to keep your lightsaber till after the first scene.
I was proposing one way to get the PCs together and get the game going quickly. It seems your changes might have the opposite effect?
runekyndig says:
... got her cybernetics while returning to the spacestation. ...
It seems, from what we see, that this is a process that would only take
hours, so not nearly as long as we are maybe thinking. Especially since the time was not taken to find/make bespoke parts. I don't see any problem with the original of getting hurt in the first Order 66 attack and then finding yourself in the second with your new legs. But use whichever version you like.
runekyndig says:
... The troopers who just saved her life, turned on her and opened fire. ... the betrail is perhaps even bigger, as the troopers just saved her, and then gunned her down ...
That is a cool addition. Makes the whole situation make even less sense to the characters.
But why are the others with you if the order has just been given? Having them flee here from the attack, only to find it is the trap Obi-Wan feared is a simple solution to get everyone together. The clones then attack for the second time.
This could still have been what happened to you, making our starting scene your third fight in the past day: the one where you get blown up, the one where your saviours betray you, and then this one where they track you down again?
runekyndig says:
... Using her light saber with her off hand (real hand) her defenses was weak and her new arm was blow to bits ...
Is this before the game starts? I am proposing we play out that scene, but you can choose if you still have your lightsaber or if it was destroyed before the start scene. If you still have it at the start, then we don't know if it will survive (but being willing to lose it gives us freedom to do things we might not otherwise want to do) we will play to find out what happens.
I am also not sure if this your lightsaber being blown up or your arm?
runekyndig says:
... but she is mobile and has her lightsaber. ...
If you want to be. But you could also emerge from the bacta tank and take the first few posts to get yourself mobile. This can take as long as you like, I am not imposing any forced convalescence on you, just reacting to the description above. You would also be welcome to emerge from the bacta ready for action, whatever you like.
runekyndig says:
... This is where Brenya comes in and get Voss back into the ship and they leave. Voss is fitted with her new yellow arm, that is 20% to big, but its the one they have. ...
This does mean you are without an arm for the first scene, till you can find the replacement? Though there is some appeal to you needing to be fitted with (non-fitting) cybernetics
twice in one day.
You are welcome to make these changes, though I also liked the other, where the PCs saved you and got you your cybernetics, this adds a extra layer of 'blame' because /they/ got you things that are 'wrong'.
Let me know if you want me to frame what I was proposing more clearly.